Let’s take a look at how we could rewrite the profile above: Why is this profile better than the previous one? First, qualifying yourself and explaining why you are fun to be around gives some context.
The line, “Excited to get out of bed each morning and see what new opportunities I can create for myself and others.” What does this line actually communicate?
It says you are passionate, compassionate, and a positive person to be around.
If you ask any woman what are the most attractive traits that a man can possess, most likely her answer will be, funny, intelligent, compassionate.
Better alternatives include using song lyrics or memorable movie one liners.